你能避开的坑-提高写作

以2017年01月07日雅思大作文为例,我们一起来提高写作能力吧。
题目

Art classes, including subjects like painting and drawing, are important for student development and should be compulsory in high school.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

分析

针对这类的是非对错题,首先得观点明确,绝不能拿着辩证主义方法去辩论,说这个话题可对可错,只是一大忌讳。
拿这题目而言问题是To what extent do you agree or disagree?

那么,我们必须回答,错或对。然后再进行自圆其说,那么对的话可以
1.从Art classes, including subjects like painting and drawing, is important的角度来展开。
2. It should be compulsory in high school来展开。

如果错的话可以
1.从题目Art classes, including subjects like painting and drawing, are important并没有很重要,更重要的是Chinese, science and so on 的角度来展开。
2. It should be compulsory in high school的否定方面来展开。

写作素材

1. 写作开头:
立场分明,短小精悍
Nowadays many people discuss whether or not we need …
Now, whether … has become a controversial topic.
Different people have different opinions.
Recently the … has been brought into focus… Never before in history has the issue been more visible.

2. 写作结构
四段论,以这次的作文题目为范例。
首段,介绍背景。让步段,由于经济全球化竞争激烈,很多人认为学习艺术是一种浪费时间和精力,应该把有限的时间和精力,用于更有核心竞争力的事情上。反驳段,然而,过度的强调基本学科教学,而忽视艺术的后果很严重,会造成道德滑坡等不好的现象。
总结段,总结分论点,强调学习艺术的重要性和加入课堂的必要性。

注意

一般情况一个paragraph一个idea。不能过于使用examples,要注意字数和语句的连贯性,段落之间一定要平衡。
范文

“Artwork” is a noun that refers to all of the things created by people to pursue beauty or to reveal the true essence of our lives. Often, this field is considered irrelevant in our daily lives. Many pragmatists question the necessity of artwork as compulsory education in high school, expressing concerns about efficiency.

The strongest supporters of reform stand behind the recent explosion of development in science and technology:an ever-widening scope of knowledge imparted in our universities, ranging from basic calculus equations to advanced mathematics. High foreign language standards are also now included in the high school curriculum. Consequently, to ensure their academic performance, high school students don’t have the time or energy to take art courses seriously.

However, in most art courses, the most time-consuming activities are learning craftsmanship and technique. The goal is to help students cultivate their passion for beauty and to raise their aesthetic standards. Although the positive and long-lasting ramifications of these courses may be obscure at first, they will be manifested in the future. For example, when students are tempted by drugs or other depravities, they will avoid them. They will be motivated to succeed and make a fortune.

Upon a careful evaluation of these reform proposals and their counter-arguments, I subscribe to the notion that art education is still an essential part of our high school educational system. The academic achievements of a student are indeed very important. But to ensure this, a love of life and beauty are equally indispensable.
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